New Intro to Jeremiah Stone

Working on an update to Jeremiah Stone by putting a better intro into place. Here's the draft, which drops you straight into where the action begins. Feedback wanted:

With his mind teetering on the edge, Jeremiah reviewed his plan and knew it probably led to certain death, but he was familiar with death. In fact, he’d journeyed across the grey void twice already only to be denied by the Divine both times. In that experience, however, he learned hatred, he learned the meaning of retribution, and he learned a little bit more because after he awoke from his coma he could hear voices, voices which weren't there. But now he knew the truth of them. Now he knew the world was not as it seemed, as everyone believed. There was more occurring than people imagined with Heaven and Hell being just another stepping stone from what we currently lived within. And what no one else knew is that angels and demons moved among us bartering for our lives.

Jeremiah understood that now all because the voices he heard made too much sense. They drifted in and out of his mind like lucid daydreams, but some of the words were of names he knew, names within the mob. Names of men he used to associate with regularly. At least that was the case up until the point he died for the second time. Now, he was abandoned, left for dead, and all alone in the world. That fact didn't bother Jeremiah though because he was also full of hatred, skilled in bending the world to his need, and determined to enact some revenge.

Of course, most wars start with revenge, and Jeremiah knew he was about to start a war. He knew how his actions would create a rift, causing turmoil in an already shaky situation. And he knew that once started there was no walking away. There was no turning back. There was only survival while pursuing his personal vendetta against those who made him who he was, what he was. They were the only ones to blame because there had always been more to Jeremiah than met the eye.

So as Jeremiah paced down the cold concrete among the darkened skyscrapers of Manhattan, he could only fathom one action; the kidnapping Zygi Wolf. Why Zygi? Because he was the one man his new enemies seemed interested in. He was also the one man Jeremiah was going to use to piss off the Divine enough to get their attention. This one action was going to be the start of his war, a war against both God and the Devil for taking away his death. Soon enough, his pain was going to be their pain. He just hoped he’d survive long enough to twist the screws deep enough that neither would deny him death again.